Re: [PATCH 1/5] HOWTO: add Japanese translation of Documentation/HOWTO

[Jesper Juhl]

On 19/07/07, Greg Kroah-Hartman <gregkh@xxxxxxx> wrote:
> From: Tsugikazu Shibata <tshibata@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
>
> Add the japanese translation of the Documentation/HOWTO file.

A few comments below.

> Signed-off-by: Tsugikazu Shibata <tshibata@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
> Cc: IKEDA Munehiro <m-ikeda@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
> Signed-off-by: Greg Kroah-Hartman <gregkh@xxxxxxx>
> ---
>  Documentation/ja_JP/HOWTO |  650 +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
>  1 files changed, 650 insertions(+), 0 deletions(-)
>  create mode 100644 Documentation/ja_JP/HOWTO
>
> diff --git a/Documentation/ja_JP/HOWTO b/Documentation/ja_JP/HOWTO
> new file mode 100644
> index 0000000..b2446a0
> --- /dev/null
> +++ b/Documentation/ja_JP/HOWTO
> @@ -0,0 +1,650 @@
> +NOTE:
> +This is Japanese translated version of "Documentation/HOWTO".

I'd suggest "This is a Japanese translated version ..." or perhaps
"This is a version of Documentation/HOWTO translated into Japanese".


> +This one is maintained by Tsugikazu Shibata <tshibata@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>

I'd write "This document is maintained by ..."

> +and JF Project team <www.linux.or.jp/JF>.

"and the JF Project team ..."

> +If you find difference with original file or problem in translation,

How about "If you find any difference between this document and the
original file or a problem with the translation,"

> +please contact maintainer of this file or JF project.

"please contact the maintainer ..."

> +
> +Please also note that purpose of this file is easier to read for non
> +English natives and not to be intended to fork. So, if you have any
> +comments or updates of this file, please try to update Original(English)
> +file at first.


Shouldn't this be something along the lines of
"Please also note that the purpose of this file is to be easier to
read for non English (read: Japanese) speakers and is not intended as
a fork. So if you have any comments or updates for this file please
try to update the original English file first."


<snip - can't comment on the actual Japanese text>


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